Jeff:
1) Let's cut out "in fact."
2) I'm not sure if it's worth explaining "purse seines" to landlubbers, although Carter Foster told me a simple way to explain them is that they work like the hood of a sweatshirt.
3) It is wrinkle, even though it is periwinkle.
4) Let's cut out the first "sort of," before evidence.
5) Let's say "shortly after midnight."
Thanks, Bud
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